Chapter 3 :Coherence,What coherence is in writing How to achieve coherence The use of coordinate and subordinate sentences,What coherence is in writing？,Sticking together Structure and if we are more modest, we can be more popular. The more we offer, the more we can gain；the more modest we are, the more popular we will be.,Logical coherence,(F) All the players jumped from the bench and the referee made an unfair announcement of the results. (T) The referee made an unfair announcement of the results and (so) all the players jumped from the bench.,Coherence,Sentence: proper sentence structure. Paragraph: sentences in a paragraph should stick tightly. Essay: thesis statement too; moreover; equally important; again 2.enumeration: firstly; secondly; to begin with 3.concession: naturally; admittedly,PART Rhetorical Focus,The Use of Coordinate and Subordinate Sentences,3.1 Description,Coordination: To emphasize that certain ideas and actions are equally important. Subordination: To distinguish a main idea or action from less important ones.,3.2 Example Sentences,They considered going to a movie, but they went to the mall instead. After considering going to a movie, they went to the mall instead.,Which action is more important?,3.3 Example Passage 1,Watching TV is a popular way to spend leisure time and makes viewers apathetic. Many people come home tired in the evenings, and turn on the TV to relax. They may intend to watch just news, but then a game show comes on next, and they decided to watch a little of that, or they get too comfortable to get out of the recliner, and they end up spending the whole evening hypnotized by electronic sound and images. These people become indifferent to their real lives. Their families and friends come to seem less real to them than glamorous and vivid TV personalities. Their daily existence seems dull, too, compared with the dramatic or hilarious events on the screen.,Watching TV is a popular way to spend leisure time and makes viewers apathetic. Typical coordination: 2 actions, equal weight Analysis: Watching TV is a popular way to spend leisure time. Watching TV is a popular way to makes viewers apathetic.,Watching TV is a popular way to spend leisure time, but excessive viewing makes viewers apathetic and indifferent to their real lives.,Many people come home tired in the evenings, and turn on the TV to relax. “turn on the TV”more important. need to be emphasized over the other. Revision: Many people who come home tired in the evenings turn on the TV to relax.,They may intend to watch just news, but then . comes on next, and they decided to , or they get , and they end up spending the whole evening . Revision: Although they may, they decided to watchthat comes on next, or they getConsequently, they end up spending the whole evening.,Their families and friends come to seem less real to them than glamorous and vivid TV personalities; their daily existence seems dull, too, compared with the dramatic or hilarious events on the screen.,Their families and friends come to seem less real to them than glamorous and vivid TV personalities. Their daily existence seems dull, too, compared with the dramatic or hilarious events on the screen.,3.4 Conclusion,Coordination and Subordination depend on: Importance of actions make your essay: Clear Effective Coherent,