Writing,读书使人充实， 讨论使人机敏， 写作使人严谨。,假定你是李华，暑假在伦敦学习，得知当地美术馆要举办中国画展。请写一封信申请做志愿者，内容包括： 1写信目的； 2个人优势； 3能做的事情。 注意： 1词数100左右； 2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3结束语已为你写好。,写信目的,个人优势,能做的事情,Step 1 Identify(明确) the problems,Problem 1: 书写不规范,Problem 2: 词汇太简单,Problem 3: 句式太单一,Problem 4: 表达不得体,Problem 5: 行文不连贯,Besides,Problem 6: 要点不齐全,Step 2 Define(定义) a good writing,高考作文评分标准 1. 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。 2. 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。 3. 词数少于 80和多于 120的，从总分中减去2分。 4. 评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性。 5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写汉词汇用法均可接受。 6. 如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。,1. 内容要点,2. 应用词汇,3. 语法结构的数量和准确性,4. 上下文的连贯性,5. 语言的得体性,专家“四看”：一看卷面； 二看要点； 三看流畅度；四看结构。,Step 3 Explore solutions,Solution 1,感谢,词汇替换，词组优先,邀请,道歉,开心,appreciate,be grateful,delighted,on top of the world,apologize,make an apology,why not,how about,happy,thank,sorry,invite,Solution 2,肯定不如双否好,陈述不如倒装妙,主动不如被动巧,分词结构不能少,句式丰富，灵活多变,e.g. 1. We succeeded with your help. We _ succeed _ your help. There is no doubt that There is no denying that There is nothing ambiguous about 2. There is nothing ambiguous about Americans love of sports.,肯定不如双否好,couldnt,without,e.g. 1. Our library lies in the center of our school, which can hold over 100 students. In the center of our school lies our library, which can hold over 100 students. 2. You can face up to the ups and downs in life only when you can find inner peace in your heart. Only when you can find inner peace in your heart can you face up to the ups and downs in life.,陈述不如倒装妙,e.g. The teacher requires all the students to attend the assembly. All the students are required to attend the assembly.,It is said that It is reported that It is suggested that As is said above, As is known to all, ,主动不如被动巧,1. The flowers smell sweet in the garden. 2. They attract the visitors to the beauty of nature. The flowers smelling sweet in the garden attract the visitors to the beauty of nature.,分词结构不能少,e.g. 1. The lecture started at 7 pm last night. 2. It was followed by an observation of the moon.,The lecture, starting at 7 pm last night, was followed by an observation of the moon.,1. Researchers have long been interested in discovering exactly howsmartpandas are. (替换词汇) 2. It is a tradition for Chinese people to respect the elderly and take care of the children. (替换成短语) 3. 翻译：毫无疑问你会喜欢上中国传统文化。(There is no doubt that) 4. The Winter Olympics will be held in 2022. The Winter Olympics will bring a good chance to introduce China to the world. (使用to do形式) 5. He did not know the beauty of calligraphy(毛笔字) until he began to learn it. (改成倒装句或强调句) 6. People say that the color red can bring people good luck. (改成被动句),Practice：Rewrite following sentences.,Researchers have long been interested in discovering exactly how _ pandas are. 2. It is a tradition for Chinese people to _ the elderly and take care of the children. 3. 翻译：毫无疑问你会喜欢上中国传统文化。,There is no doubt that you will be fond of traditional Chinese culture.,show respect for,(clever/intelligent),4. The Winter Olympics _in 2022 will bring a good chance to introduce China to the world. 5. Not until he began to learn it _ the beauty of calligraphy. 倒装句 Or: _ not until he began to learn it _ he knew the beauty of calligraphy. 强调句 6. _ that the color red can bring people good luck.,It is said,to be held,did he know,It was,that,Solution 3,but, however, on the contrary,转折,行文连贯,思维严谨,递进,让步,因果,归纳,besides, whats more/worse,although/though, even though,therefore, thus, as a result,in short, generally speaking,1. I dont really want to go. _, its too late now. 2. _scientists have learnt a lot about the universe, there is much we still dont know.,Practice：Fill in the blanks with proper linking words.,Besides,Although/Though,e.g. You cannot improve your past, but you can improve your future. Once time is wasted, life is wasted.,Step 4 Take action,假定你是李华，暑假在伦敦学习，得知当地美术馆要举办中国画展。请写一封信申请做志愿者，内容包括： 1写信目的： 2个人优势： 3能做的事情。 注意： 1词数100左右； 2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3结束语已为你写好。,Show Time !,Sample: Dear Sir or Madam, Im Li Hua, a Chinese student having education in London now. I have heard the Chinese painting exhibition is to be held, and Im writing this letter to apply for a volunteer position. The reasons why Im qualified for the job are as follows. Firstly, I have had an interest in Chinese painting ever since I was a child. As a result, I am familiar with this art form and can give very specific introduction to the visitors. Furthermore, I can speak,fluent Chinese and English at the same time, which makes it no problem for me to help visitors from all over the world. If Im chosen to be a volunteer, I would be able to help the visitors understand the paintings and share the history behind those Chinese paintings with them. Thank you for your time. Hope to hear from you soon ! Yours, Li Hua,S