高中英语新高考-英语作文：推敲词汇之make的替换词 （附：实战作文批改实录） 我在前面讲过抽象名词的使用，例如： If we are exposed to much TV, we will lose imagination. 我们可以把if 的从句换成： Rich exposure to TV 但是一个问题是：谓语怎么处理？ 同学们普遍这样来的： Rich exposure to TV will make us lose imagination. 当然句子是对的，但是，英语中老使用make ，会让人感到词穷。实际 上这样表达： Rich exposure to TV will cost us imagination. 2 Cost 本身就可以表示“使某人失去”。比较以下例子： The result made me disappointed. The result disappointed me. The Internet makes me learn English more conveniently. The Internet facilitate my English study. The interference makes the country involved in a war. The interference involves the country in a war. 但是这样的词到此有哪些？我把牛津词典从头翻到尾，挑出130 个这 样的词汇解决大家的难题。这里节选最常用的31 个： 必要性： necessitate 激发，鼓励：inspire, encourage 增加，减少：minimize, multiply, expose, rid 联系： associate, involve, alienate 使得 : allow, leave, keep, set 感情色彩：convince, impress, satisfy, excite, amaze 有助于： help, facilitate, smooth, sharpen 3 能力： enable, equip, entitle 消极： anger, frustrate, burden, cost, blind, ruin 练习： 改写句子，请替换其中的make: 1. The newspapers make me know what take place in the world. 2. Computers make us solve difficult math problems in a short time. 3. The news made us feel afraid. 答案： 1. The newspapers keep me informed of what take place in the world. 2. Computers enable us to solve difficult math problems in a short time. 3. The news filled us with fear. 4 实战作文批改 Innovation Nowadays, innovation has been gaining increasingly popularity, which can lay a solid foundation for a country s development. The gravity（gravity: extreme importance and a cause for worry 严重性，这是这个词的英文解释，创新这件事并没有for worry，所以 这个词使用的不恰当，直接改为importance即可。） of innovation can never be overemphasized. As is known to all, it can serve as a constant source for productivity and technology, thus enhancing a countrys international competitiveness. And （改 为转折连词however更好） without innovation, how can we enjoy a comfortable modern life? 总结： 逻辑：该作者本段谈创新的重要性，从科技和生产率两方面讲，且最 后从反面论证，非常到位！ 5 语言：本段用到了不少短语，例如cannot be overemphasized, a constant source for ， enhancing a country s international competitiveness，非常棒！ As middle school students, developing innovative skills should undoubtedly be put at the top of the agenda(与前文状语逻辑注意 不一致，应为：we should develop innovative skills and put them at the top of the agenda undoubtedly.). Considering that Chinese students nowadays are bent on wining test scores at the sacrifice of creative ability, so enhanceing （so 连词， 后接句子， 动词原形不能单独放句首）our awareness of innovative learning, critical thinking and self-discipline might be the first step on the right way. Actually, just exposing ourselves to numerous knowledge can make a difference.（这句话在逻辑上与前文关系不 大，可以删掉） In addition, teachers are supposed to play an important role in fosteringstudent s（ students ） sense of creativity. （本句比较单薄，我在课堂上强调，说某人应该做某事有点 过于强势，最后后面加上by doing.或者 instead of doing.。例如 本句加一个尾巴：.by orgainzing various group activities to make class dynamic instead of cramming education.) 总结： 6 逻辑：从当前我们应试教育不足谈创新的必要，然后说教师的重要性。 本段论证有点小遗憾，本段本来按要求说必要性并提建议，但中间作 者表达，我们体会一下： 应试教育过于关注分数；实际上，学习很多知识很重要。 这个 actually来得很突兀，前后没有关联，读起来就不爽，记住：让 人不爽且让人费解的作文都不会得高分！ 语言：作者用到了很多话题词块，例如：innovative skills, enhance the awareness等等，活用能力相当之强，是一个很有灵性的孩子！ In a word, only with the joint effort of both of our middle school students and teachers can we possess the skill s of innovation. 批改老师和审核老师打分：16-17 因为硬伤：语法错误和部分逻辑有拼凑嫌疑。 我的打分：18 分-19 分 7 结论： 本次作文较为突出的问题是，逻辑问题。写作时没有理清各部 分的逻辑关系，逻辑有点松散，行文不够紧凑。希望下次写完后能自 己认真阅读几遍，争取避免这样的错误。其次，想要用高级词汇，替 换一般词汇时， 要认真查字典， 落实单词意思和用法，不要望词生义。