In our modern life，it is necessary to communicate information and contact with the world by mass media，such as books，television and film. Right now，I compare the advantage and disadvantage about these，and illustrate which communicative method is the most effective(你的开头这样写不好，首先 communicate information 这样的英文搭配不当，尽管它的中文意思是交流信息，其次不应该用上 right now 这样的字眼，太口语化了，你的开头可以这样写：In our modern life, it is necessary to communicate with each other and contact with the world by mass media, such as book, television and films etc, we benefit a lot from these media. However we still can find some negative effects of them. So in this essay, I will compare the advantages and disadvantages about these and illustrate which communicative method is the most effective.Books，have longer history than television and film。(Book boast the longest history compared with television and film )Which can date back from ancient society。 As ancient communicative way(form)，books can bring our(us, bring sb sth, our 表示“我们的”) deep thinking and understand people （改成 make us understood, 因为该句的主语是book, 谓语是 can +后面的动词，翻译为书本令我们明白。而不是书本明白人们，因此全句为 books can bring us deep thinking and make us understood the the world in a better way, (in a high level 不地道，我帮你改成 in a better way)。If u read the classical books as MOYAN novels。Obviously，reading books is not so as digestible as television and film。You always spend too much time on enjoying a novel or profession books。(这两句感觉和上面的句子没有衔接性，你是想写读书的缺点吗？若是写缺点的话，你没有必要用 if .这样来写，因为作文当中一用到 if 就有口语化的感觉，你可以直接说，However, reading books is not so as digestible as television and film。You always spend too much time on enjoying a novel or profession books.)In term of providing entertainment，watching television will bo( be) a good choice，especially 我 when we are eating at the table (when we are earing as well as feel boring in leisure( spare) time。We can choose any progamg (programme) in any channel only that decided by mood。And the disadvantage is serious entertaining。（这个句子我知道你是想写缺点，但是还是没有衔接性，你可以说，but on the other hand, the disadvantages of watching TV is obvious. ）The television program are at price of decrasing the receation bottom line to cater viewer taste。While in any other media，film industry are flourishing。 Film not only bring our( us) stereo enjoyment with development of 3D or 4d，but also take them (us) into a virtual world，sometimes in ancient，sometimes in future。 Additionly( Additionally)，it is possible for them( us) see film at home by computer or home theater。The only drawback that the addimission(没有这个单词哦，应该是这个 admission 吧) fee are a little high。From what I have compared adove（above ） ，we can safely conclude that the film are effective for its two aspects。On one thing，the fantastic drama，the well knowen(known) director and artists，the large number of money all devote( devoted) in the two hour film，which make usimmerse in the different civilization。On another，the latest of(删去 of) film technology give( gives) us visual and hearing(auditory) enjoyable (enjoyment) and make a deep impression in our mind。Comment:1， 1，你结构清晰，分析各自的优缺点。2， 2，但是发觉有两个问题，第一，你不会衔接锻炼和句子，例如你上句是讲优点， 你应该用句子过度到缺点，第二，一些代词你搞不清楚 记住 us 是宾格 our 表示我们的