由2009年高考情景作文试 卷分析看如何指导学生写 情景作文情景作文写作要求内容要点、上下文的连贯、词汇和 句式的多样性及语言的准确性。考试说明指出：情景作文评分原则 看内容先定档 重点参考语言质量 注重整体语言运用能力缺细节，进三档 （1214分）缺要点，进四档 （611分）假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华为响应绿化祖国的号召, 你 班四月十二日去郊区植树。请根据一下四幅图的先后顺序, 介绍指 数活动的全过程, 给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。 注意: 字数不少于60。 提示词: 郊区 suburbs 情景作文 题审题1.题目：Green Action in Our Class 2.题中的信息：时间 地点 目的3.第一人称 提示词图1内容要点及细节要 点出发细 节清晨骑车出发风景和心情图2内容要点及细节要 点种树细 节挖坑搬树种树浇水图3内容要点及细节要 点安插提示牌细 节安插提示牌爱护树木图4内容要点及细节要 点照相留念细 节手里拿着种 树工具站在小树林 和牌子旁心情或感受顺顺序要点要点的细节细节 支撑连连接词词Picture 1set outearly in the morning; on April 12th； suburbs; by bike；early in the morning Picture 2plant treesarrive; dig holes; carry trees; water trees;as soon as we arrived at the planting spot; when we reached ； upon arrival Picture 3put up a board put up a board saying ”please protect trees”afterwards; after finishing planting all the trees;Picture 4take photostake photos; stand in a raw with tools in hands; beside the board and treesbefore leaving; in order to treasure the activity第一幅图：1.That was April the 12th.The sun rose far behind the hills and golden the roads and farms. My classmates and I cycled to the suburbs with great exciment in our hearts. 2.In order to make our country a more beautiful place to live in, our class decided to plant trees in the suburbs on April 12th. 3.Aiming at our destination, we began our journey by bike. There were trees and mountains on both sides of the road ,which made us feel happy and excited.第一幅图4.In order to do some deeds to improve our environment, our class organized an activity to plant trees in suburbs.5. Early in the morning,April 12th, I together with my fellowmates rode to the suburbs. The sun shone upon us and the wind blew swiftly above the growing trees. Finally we arrived at our destination.第一幅图5. Im Li Hua, a student from Senior 3 Class One of Hong Xing Middle School. In order to beatutify our environment, we held a meaningful event-planting trees in suburbs. 6. Im Li Hua from class one senior three of Red Star Middle School.On April 12th, our class went to suburbs to plant trees in order to green our country. We got up early that day and went to suburbs by bike happily. 第一幅图7.We rode bikes along the road leading to the suburbs. 8.Early in the morning we set out by riding bikes when all of us felt extrodinarilly delighted travelling through the beautiful countryside.第一幅图出现的错误： 1.审题错误：没有交代时间地点 2.语言错误：I and my classmatesin/at April 12nd图2内容要点及细节要 点种树细 节挖坑搬树种树浇水顺顺序要点要点的细节细节 支撑连连接词词Picture 1set outearly in the morning; on April 12th； suburbs; by bike；early in the morning Picture 2plant treesarrive; dig holes; carry trees; water trees;as soon as we arrived at the planting spot; when we reached ； upon arrival Picture 3put up a board put up a board saying ”please protect trees”afterwards; after finishing planting all the trees;Picture 4take photostake photos; stand in a raw with tools in hands; beside the board and treesbefore leaving; in order to treasure the activity第二幅图1.Upon arriving at the suburbs, we started planting trees instantly.some of us were digging holes while others were busy carrying young trees. Afterwards two boys put earth into the holes.第二幅图2.Upon arrival, we started to plant trees without delay.We feel satisfied with the action we took. Divided into several groups, some boys dug the holes. Some boys carried the young trees while some girls watered the trees. 3.Arriving, we wasted no time and took action at once.图3内容要点及细节要 点安插提示牌细 节安插提示牌爱护树木顺顺序要点要点的细节细节 支撑连连接词词Picture 1set outearly in the morning; on April 12th； suburbs; by bike；early in the morning Picture 2plant treesarrive; dig holes; carry trees; water trees;as soon as we arrived at the planting spot; when we reached ； upon arrival Picture 3put up a board put up a board saying ”please protect trees”afterwards; after finishing planting all the trees;Picture 4take photostake photos; stand in a raw with tools in hands; beside the board and treesbefore leaving; in order to treasure the activity第三幅图1.Our class set up a sign reading （ and wrote）“Protecting trees,please” with happy smiles on their faces, showing their satisfaction of having planted so many trees. 2.Having planted trees, we decided to make a notice board reads “Protect the trees” in front of the field. 第三幅图3.After planting, two boys also planted a sign saying “Protect the trees” , reminding people not to do something harmful to the trees. 4.In front of the trees, a notice saying “Protect trees” was put up by two of us.第三幅图出现的错误： 1.Digged wholes 2.Carryed taked planed trees 用词比较简单 没有更多的表达法 图4内容要点及细节要 点照相留念细 节手里拿着种 树工具站在小树林 和牌子旁心情或感受顺顺序要点要点的细节细节 支撑连连接词词Picture 1set outearly in the morning; on April 12th； suburbs; by bike；early in the morning Picture 2plant treesarrive; dig holes; carry trees; water trees;as soon as we arrived at the planting spot; when we reached ； upon arrival Picture 3put up a