高 考 快 递 NMET 书面表达评分标准：第五档(很好) (21-25分)完全完成了试题规定的要求。覆盖所有的内容要点。应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。语法结构和词汇方面有些错误，但为尽力使用较复杂 结构和较高级词汇所致，具有较强的语言运用能力。有效的使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。一、适当地使用一些单词、词组、习语来代替一些单词 ，以增加文采，丰富语气的表现力。1.A new building is being built in our school.2. He pretended not to see the pretty girl.hear what I said.He turned a blind eye to the pretty girl.a deaf ear to what I said. A new building is under construction in our school.Writing beautiful sentences3. It is raining heavily.4. The PRC was founded in the year 1949.It is raining cats and dogs.The year 1949 saw the foundation of the PRC.二、尽量避免过多地重复使用某一单词。1.I like reading while he likes playing football.2. When summer comes, the day is getting longer and longer, and the night is getting shorter and shorter.I like reading while he enjoys playing football.When summer comes, the day is getting longer andlonger, and the night shorter and shorter.Hardworking and careful, the girl passed the test.Its I who hit him in the face.How glad Im that you have made so much progress.三、可适当地打破常规，用一些倒装句、强调句或 感叹句,可以为文意的表达增添一点新意。1. The girl was hardworking and careful, and she passed the test.2. I hit him in the face.3. I am glad that you have made so much progress.四、使用主从复合句、分词、不定式等来代替简单句 ，能使书面表达行文更加流畅有力。He lay on the grass, counting the stars in the sky.In order to pass the entrance examination, we are studying hard. He lay on the grass, counting the stars in the sky.1. He was very humorous. We all like to play with him.2. We are studying hard in order to pass the entrance examination.3. He lay on the grass and counted the stars in the sky.五、改变句子开头方式，适当地把一些成份提前位 于句子的开头，使整个句子读起来跌宕起伏，增加 书面表达的表现力。Between the two buildings stood a temple, in which an old monk lived.On the surface of the river is floating the remains of Tom.Deep in thought, he forgot his lunch.1. A temple stood between the two buildings , in which an old monk lived.2. The remains of Tom is floating on the surface of the river.3. As he was deep in thought, he forgot his lunch.六、注意语句间的衔接与连贯，可使全文结构紧凑，层次清楚过渡自然。英语中的关联词语可以称之为“篇章的纽带”，这些关联 词语可以是表示顺序的，如 ;表示时间的: ; 表示并列或选择的： ; 表因果的: 等 。After graduation, he worked as a teacher, in a post office, he quitted his job and did business,he became a millionaire.first, later, then,finallynow, at present, in the past, during the dayand, orbecause, so, thanks tolater thenfinallyfirst高考英语优秀书面表达赏析原题假设你是李华，你的澳大利亚朋友Dick听说中国的中小学 正在减轻学生的学习负担，来信询问有关情况。请你根据下 面提供的信息，写一封回信，談一談减负给你的学习和生活 带来的变化。 周末活动（减负前）周末活动（减负后）白天：上课、做作业白天：参加博物馆、 学习电脑、绘画等 晚上：做作业晚上：看新闻、读书 、看报 就寝时间：11：30就寝时间：10：00Dear Dick,How nice to hear from you again. In your letter, you asked me about the reduction of learning load in China. Now, Ill tell you something about it.In the past, we had lots of homework to do and had little time to do other things. Even on weekends, we went to school and did homework in the daytime, and still did homework at night. I usually went to bed at 11:30, so I felt sleepy the next day.Now, after reducing learning load, we have much more spare time. On weekends, I usually go to museums, study computer, and do some drawing and so on. At night, I often watch TV or read some books and newspapers. Whats better, I go to bed at 10:00, so I no longer feel sleepy. Best wishes, Li Hua. 看图说 话 Talk about the pictures