返回作文点评题目要求假设你是李明,听说你所在的学校附近将拟建一家造纸厂,对此你和同学们持反对意见。现在请你根据下列内容,给校长写一封信.陈述反对建厂的理由。反对理由:占用桦地:5水;产生噪音导致结果;本张可以建六圆,建厂会异救市民无处休闲;污椅物;影响敷学和居民生活。-100左右;2.参考词汇:letout排放;3.信的开头和结尾已经给出,不计人总词数。_eahe龋dn惜更erI伞n】astudentofourschoolinGradeOne,Yourstruly,LiMing写作批阆【e乏lrhead【anlerIm2楝【u(_(】fOuFsh()】in(;r“(_P()e.WeheHr寻l)】【】!thatapaperfactorywillbebuiltnearourschoolsoon.Onhear-ingthenews,thewholeclassagainsttheplan,Firstofallfo_buildsuchafaclorywilltdkeuptoomuchlandwherec)Lldhavepeendsed-to一uild-a黄筝+k.Secondly,thefactorywillletoutdirtyandpollutedwatervwhichwilldoharmtopeoplelivinghereandanimalsaswellasplantsThirdly,thefactorywillmakealotofnoiseduringtheirproduceswhichwilhaveabadeffectontheteachingactivityofourschool.Whatsmorespeople“sliveswillbedisturbedbythenoisecomingfromthefactory.Therefore,wedefinitelyinsistthatthefactoryshouldnotbebuilthere。Yourstruly。LiMing教师点评1.Wehear鼻bDu丨Vhiat4papetMaetorbout后不能接宾语从句.而hear则可以。2.thewholeclassagainsttheplan中在against前加上are。beagainst是动词短语,意为“反对“。3.landwherecouldhavebeen中where改为that或which。分析句子知从旬中铁少主语,故用关系代词that或which。经典句式1.Secondlythefactorywillletoutdirtyandpollutedwatervwhichwilldoharmtopeoplelivinghereandanimalsaswellasplants。2.WhatsmprerpgoplelWillbedisfarhedbythenoisecomingfromthefaiciorys东技3.Thereforewedefinitelyinsistthatthefactoryshouldnotbeluillher静.