高考专题复习:写作 ( 六 )1. 性别与婚姻（Sex as well as ; also; 选择or; eitheror; or else; otherwise 原因because ; owing to; due to ;on account of ; 结果so ; therefore ; thus ; as a result 时间when ;soon after ; before; later ; first ; and then ; next ; finally ; afterwards. 比较on the country ; on the other hand ; like 转折but ; yet; however ; although; in spite of ; instead ; 递进besides ; moreover ; even ; in addition 举例for example/instance; such as ; that is ; namely ; 总结after all ; in short ; in general ; generally speaking AdverbsAdverbs Therefore ; otherwise ; furthermore ; Thus ; finally ; moreover ; namely ; besides ; although ; afterwards ; however ; personally; Letter writing 结束语Closing 亲人、家属：Yours lovingly ; Yours affectionately 朋友、平辈：Sincerely yours Yours sincerely 上级、长者：Yours respectfully Respectfully yours 单位、部门：Yours sincerely Yours faithfully 书信正面信封背面便 条（病/事假条） June 5th , 2000 Dear Mr. Zhao, I am sorry that I am unable to attend school during the following week because of the Sports Meet. The school expects me to play an important part in it . And I will be back to class in a week . I hope you will excuse my absence .(in fact , I take a French leave) Yours respectfully CharlesCharles Encl: the PE Teachers certificate (Encl: the PE Teachers certificate (证明）证明）通知、通告（ NOTICE/ANNOUNCEMENT 口头通知： Ladies and Gentlemen, May I have you attention please? 正 文 书面通知： NOTICE In celebration of May Day , there will be - 正 文 School Office April 25th , 2000 Diary日记 Wednesday May 5th CloudyIt is nearly a month since I began keeping diaries. I find it a very good exercise in English composition.I got back my essay on A Visit to the Park . It was marked with A.There were only three mistakes in it: one in grammar and two in idiom.Im happy to see that I can now express myself in English more usually than ever before. ,怎样才算是一篇好的书面表达呢？两个关键:1)用词造句：尽可能运用比较熟悉的 词组、短语或成语；从句式上，力 求变换各种句式。2)行文连贯，运用恰当的连接词,使文 章结构严密具有较强的逻辑性。How to judge the levels of the composition ?15评分原则1 本题总分为15分，按5个档次给分2 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后 以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。3 词数少于50或多于100的，从总分中减去1分。 4 评分时，应注意表达内容、所用词汇和语法结构的表述是否 准确、上下文是否连贯及语言表达是否得体。5 单词拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视 其对表述的影响程度予以考虑。6 如书写较差，影响表述，将分数降低一个档次。16第五档 （1315 分） 完全完成了试题所规定的任务。应用了正确的语法结构和词汇，没有或 有12处错误（为尽力使用较复杂结构或 较高级词汇所致）如：拼写、标点、大小 写等；具备较强的语言能力。有效使用了词语间的连接成分，使全文 结构紧凑，达到了预期的写作目的。17第四档 （1012 分）完成了试题所规定的任务。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要 求，有34处不影响全文意思的错误。应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内 容结构紧凑，达到了预期的写作目的。18第三档 （79 分）基本完成了试题所规定的任务。应用的语法结构和词汇基本能满足任 务的要求，有56处错误，但不影响理解 。应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文 内容连贯。整体而言，基本达到了预期 的写作目的。19第二档 （46分） 未恰当完成试题所规定的任务。 语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，错误较多 ，影响了对写作内容的理解。 较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性，信息未能清楚地传达给读者。20第一档 （03分）未完成试题所规定的任务有一些和内容要求相关的词汇或短语， 通篇语法结构错误所写内容与所要求内容无关或无法辨认空白卷21Write a concise passage use few words expressclear meaningTom is four years old and he is energetic. One day a bike was given to him. The bike is new and it is a light blue in color. Tom received the bike for his birthday. He struggled to ride his bike. He struggled for two hours. However, he was unsuccessful in riding the bike. Compare the two passagesFour-year-old Tom is energetic. One day, he got a light blue bike for his birthday. He struggled for two hours to ride it, but he was unsuccessful.Tom is four years old and he is energetic. One day a bike was given to him. The bike is new and it is a light blue in color. Tom received the bike for his birthday. He struggled to ride his bike. He struggled for two hours. However, he was unsuccessful in riding the bike . Outstanding Concise(best)wordybetterImprove the wordy sentence(I)1. There are many People hunting animals for living in the mountain2.A girl likes Chinese food better. 3. The employee with anger quarreled with his boss. 4.In the not too far future, our dreams will come true. 5.He gave up school on condition of the reason that it was necessary for him to support his family. (angry)(prefer)(hunters)(near)(because)Summary one :change phrases into single words improve the wordy sentence(II)1.His family live in a village which is near a river2.The house, which was newly built is very large.3.People who are interested in the job must send your resume to our company before Friday.4.We will have the party in the garden which is on the top of the main building. 5.While he is waiting for the bus, he always recites texts. (The newly-built house is very large)(People interested in the