书面表达专题(五),(2008全国卷) 假定你是李华，你的英国朋友Peter来信向你咨询如何才能学好中文。请你根据下列要点写回信。 要点：1.参加中文学习班； 2看中文书刊、电视； 3学唱中文歌曲； 4交中国朋友。,学生习作点评 (一),注意：1.词数100左右； 2可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3开头语已为你写好。 June 8,2008. Dear Peter， Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well. _ Best wishes， Li Hua,学生习作 June 8,2008 Dear Peter， Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn chinese well. Here are a few suggestions.First，it is important to take a Chinese course，as youll be able to learn from the teacher and practice with your fellow students.Then，it also helps to watch TV and read books，newspapers and magazines in Chinese whenever possible.,Besides，it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs，because by doing so youll learn and remember Chinese words more easily.You can also make more Chinese friends.They will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese. Try and write to me in Chinese next time. Best wishes， Li Hua,教师点评 (1)本文中first，then，besides，also等关联词的运用使前后衔接自然。 (2)本文好句不断，如it作形式主语，as和because引导的原因状语从句，whenever引导的让步状语从句等，为本文得高分的亮点。 (3)本文语言简练，不拖泥带水，这也为本文一大特色。 总之，本文要点齐会，语言地道流畅，达到了预期写作目的，是一篇不可多得的优秀作文。,(二) 假定你是李华，从小喜爱大熊猫(panda)，一直通过有关网站(website)关注三年前在美国圣迭哥动物园出生的小熊猫“苏琳”和她的母亲“白云”。现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园工作人员写一封信： 1自我介绍； 2祝贺苏琳生日； 3感谢工作人员； 4索取苏琳三岁生日照。,注意：1.词数100左右； 2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3开头语已为你写好。 Dear Sir/Madam， Greetings from China! _ Yours truly， Li Hua,学生习作 Dear Sir/Madam， Greetings from China! I，who is a student from Sichuan.I love pandas since I was young.Three years ago，I heard that Baiyun gave birth to Sulin，her daughter.I was very happy.I often go to your website to know something about them.I wish her happiness.I want to thank you for your work hard.,By the way，I want to have a photo of Sulin on her birthday.Can you give me one? Yours truly， Li Hua,教师点评 分析句子结构可知，此处错误运用了who引导的定语从句，故应把逗号和who去掉，is改为am。 since引导时间状语时，主句最好用完成时，love改为have loved。 work hard改为working hard或hard work。 本文出错虽然不多，但读起来感觉有些稚气，缺乏精彩词句和复杂句式，并且正文中没有提到“苏琳要过生日”这一要点。,