Diagnosis of writing 写作诊断,- 高二英语组 张 萍,About your composition,Are you satisfied with your writing?What is the problem with your writing?,Self-examining,Did you read the requirements carefully and make an outline? Did you write the sentences correctly? Did you express yourself properly? Did you write it fluently? Did you write it neatly(整洁)?,neat,organized,proper,fluent,exact,“F-open” method,Prescription 1-Organization,给下面的书面表达的主题句排序：你班同学参加了学生双语报组织的一场讨论。讨论的主题是：城市内是否可以饲养宠物。请你根据下表所提供的信息，给该报社写一篇文章，介绍讨论情况，并说明自己的观点或建议。用5个句子完成文章。,药方,A. Some students are against the idea of keeping pets. B. Some students think its a good idea to keep pets. C. I think we can keep pets at home but we must prevent them from polluting our environment. D. Recently we have had a heated discussion on whether people should keep pets or not at home in cities. E. In general, opinions differ from people to people.,D,E,B,A,C,There are many people dont like praise. Get on-line costs too much time and money. Being away from the Internet Bars is difficult for you to do. I want to give you the harm of the Internet Bars . There are many unhealthy things on the Internet, it will probably influence your future. I had some experience and I believe I could do it well.,Prescription 2-Error correction,A. grammar B. tense C. sentence pattern D. meaning E. punctuation,1,2,6,3,4,5,Prescription 3-Style choice,Which one do you prefer?,Have a try !,如果你能给我这个机会，我会不胜感激。（appreciate it） 如果我是你，我会接受他的建议。（If） 我的确希望你能来我的聚会。你会来吗？（would you） 吸烟对你和家人的健康都有害。（harm）,Prescription 4- Coherence(连贯),根据中文意思，将下列英文句子补充完整。 1.You gave me much help and encouragement. _ _ _, I couldnt have succeeded without you.（总之） 2. His parents do everything for him. _ _ _ he cannot make any decision by himself. _ _, physics is much more difficult than mathematics.（一般说来） _ _ _, he got full marks in the mathematics exam.(令我满意的是) 5. This bike is really very beautiful._, I cant afford it.(然而) 6. First, he went to France; _ he went to America.(然后) 7. At first he was against my plan, but _ _ _ he was for it.,In a word,As a result,Generally speaking,To my satisfaction,However,then,In the end,恰当使用连接词,Prescription 5-Handwriting,Example 1,要求考生根据题示进行书面表达。考生应能： （1）准确使用语法和词汇； （2）使用一定的句型、词汇； （3）清楚、连贯地表达自己的意思。评分标准分为5档（略） 1，要点要全。 2，使用一定的词汇，句型（数量） 3，准确表达，语言得体。 4，行文连贯。 5，拼写和标点，书写较差，影响交际先降个档次。,学考大纲对写作的要求,organized,proper,exact,fluent,neat,F-open method,Writing steps,1. 审题构思（要点、题材、体裁等）,2. 列点翻译（句型、词汇等）,3. 连句成文（连接过渡词、时态、人称等）,4. 誊写成稿（注意卷面、字数等）,Recovery exercise,假设你是李华，你的美国朋友Tom上个月来到北京学习。七月份你将去北京参加暑期中学生英语演讲比赛(speech contest)，你在资料搜集、语言运用等方面遇到了困难。请根据以下要点给Tom写一封电子邮件：1询问Tom的生活和学习情况；2谈谈你的困难并请Tom帮忙；3告诉Tom你打算赛后去看他。 注意： 1词数：100左右； 2可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。,Dear Tom,Its a month since you studied in Beijing. _. I am really happy to spend such an unforgettable experience with you here._for middle school students in July this summer. I think the chance is of great importance for me._, I am making preparations for it._, I still have some trouble in collecting useful materials._, I find it hard to use English properly. _if you could offer me a hand. I also hope that the great effort I am making will pay off.You know, I have been missing you since you left, so_. I cant wait to see you again! Yours Sincerely, Li Hua,How is everything going with you?,I am going to take part in an English speech contest,To have a very good performance,However,Meanwhile,I would appreciate it,I do hope to see you in Beijing after the English contest,近年来，青少年的心理健康问题引起了越来越多人的关注。你校英语角这周的主题就是“青少年的心理健康问题大家谈”。假如你叫肖鹏，请你根据下面的要点提示写一篇文章，就这个话题进行发言。 提示： 1. 学校方面：建立专门机构； 2. 家长方面：给予更多关注； 3. 青少年自己：正确处理困难。 参考词汇：心理健康 mental health 部门 department 要求： 1. 词数：100词左右； 2. 根据所给信息可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。,Homework,Nowadays, people are paying a lot more attention to young peoples mental health. In my opinion, the society should work together to solve this problem. Firstly, schools should establish a special department to help students to solve their mental problems. Secondly, parents should care more about the mental health of their children. The last point is that young people should deal with difficulties properly. They can ask their teachers and parents for advice on how to solve problems. We hope that all the young people can have a happy life.,假设你是李华，你的美国网友Tom 今年暑假想来山东旅游。请你用英语给他写一封电子邮件，向他介绍山东的三处名胜，并向他发出邀请。 参考词汇： 泰山 Mount Tai 趵突泉 Baotu Spring 孔子故里 Confucius hometown 要求：1. 词数 100 左右2. 文章开头、结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。 Dear Tom,Glad to receive your e-mail. I am very excited to learn that you are going to travel to Shandong this summer. _Looking forward to getting your reply soon. Yours sincerely, Li Hua,