书面表达训练（一）,One day my parents went to work in the fields and my little sister and Ar Fu followed them. While my parents were working, my sister walked to the river and Ar Fu followed her. She saw a beautiful flower on the bank of the river. She decided to pick it. She fell into the river. When Ar Fu saw that, it barked and jumped into the river quickly.,One day, followed by my little sister and Ar Fu, my parents went to work in the fields. While my parents were working, my sister , with nothing to do, walked to the riverside nearby with Ar Fu. At the sight of a beautiful flower on the river bank, she wanted to pick it. However, she fell into the river. Seeing that, Ar Fu barked and jumped into the water as soon as possible.,书面表达评分标准：,高考考试说明中的评分标准 评分原则： 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。 评分时应考虑：内容要点，上下文的连贯，词汇和句式的多样性 及语言的准确性。,句式的多样性,using -ing -ed -with,to improve your passage,The cat crept slowly through the grass. The cat was watching the mouse the whole time.,The gold was hidden under the ground. It was safe for many years.,I. -ing, -ed,Watching the mouse the whole time, the cat crept slowly through the grass.,Hidden under the floorboards, the gold was safe for many years.,There is a girl. She is sitting between us. 2. This is a book. The book was bought yesterday.,There is a girl who is sitting between us.,This is a book which was bought yesterday.,Rewrite following sentences,3. 走在大街上，他遇见了一个老朋友.,While he was walking in the street, he met an old friend.,4.,_, the city looks beautiful.,Walking in the street,从天空中看，,When it is seen from the sky, the city looks beautiful.,Seen from the sky,由于不知道他的电话，他无法与Tom取得联系。,Not knowing his telephone number, he cant get in touch with Tom.,reading,sleeping,shoes,barking,cat,dumbfounded（adj.目瞪口呆）,要点： 1老人穿着拖鞋读报, 狗在边上睡觉。 2 老人想出门，叫狗拿鞋。 3 狗闭着眼睛，一动 不动，汪汪直叫， 老人很纳闷。 4 猫嘴里叼着鞋走进 来，老人目瞪口呆。,参考词语: slippers (拖鞋),reading,sleeping,An old man was sitting in an armchair at home, reading his newspaper. Beside him lay a dog, sleeping soundly.,cat,dumbfounded（adj.目瞪口呆）,Seeing the cat, he was totally dumbfounded.,The fire is burning, so I feel warm.,II. with,I lost my bike, so I had to walk home.,With the fire burning, I feel warm.,With my bike lost, I had to walk home.,My mother sat in a chair with a newspaper in her hand. She left without saying goodbye.,He died with his work still unfinished.,Welcome to my home. A well-prepared room is waiting for you. Inside, there is a separate bathroom and all necessary furniture.,Welcome to my home. A well-prepared room with a separate bathroom and all necessary furniture is waiting for you.,reading,sleeping,shoes,barking,cat,dumbfounded（adj.目瞪口呆）,要点： 1老人穿着拖鞋读报, 狗在边上睡觉。 2 老人想出门，叫狗拿鞋。 3 狗闭着眼睛，一动 不动，汪汪直叫， 老人很纳闷。 4 猫嘴里叼着鞋走进 来，老人目瞪口呆。,参考词语: slippers (拖鞋),dog,shoes,slippers (拖鞋),with his slippers on,dog,bark,eyes,closed,with two eyes closed,cat,dumbfounded（adj.目瞪口呆）,shoes,with the pair of shoes in its mouth,writing,reading,sleeping,shoes,barking,cat,dumbfounded（adj.目瞪口呆）,要点： 1老人穿着拖鞋读报, 狗在边上睡觉。 2 老人想出门，叫狗拿鞋。 3 狗闭着眼睛，一动 不动，汪汪直叫， 老人很纳闷。 4 猫嘴里叼着鞋走进 来，老人目瞪口呆。,参考词语: slippers (拖鞋),An old man was sitting in an armchair at home, reading his newspaper. Beside him lay a dog, sleeping soundly. Suddenly the old man decided to leave home for a while, but he couldnt go out with his slippers on. So he woke up the dog to get the shoes for him. Out of his expectation, the dog just barked with two eyes closed again. The old man was completely puzzled. As he was wondering what was happening, he saw the cat coming towards him with the pair of shoes in its mouth. Seeing this, he was totally dumbfounded.,