IamLihua,aparticipantinyoucontinuationwritingcompetition.Havingscoredonly16formycontinuationwriting,Ifeltitunfair,soIamwritingtoyoutostatemyreasons.Formywriting,Ifeltittotallymeetstherequirementputforwardinthecontest.Tobeginwith,thestructureofmycompositionisdefinitelyclearandtheplotdevelopsreasonably,noprolixityatall.Additionally,thewordsandsentencesusedarecolorful,withoutrepeatedlyusingthesamewordagainandagain.Ievenwrotesomecompoundsentencestoupdatemywriting,suchasattributiveclause,theemphaticpattern,invertedsentenceandsoon.Finally,awell-knownsayingisusedtoendmyarticle,whichIthinkisaperfecthighlightofthepassage.Inaword,withthemeritsmentionedabove,IwonderwhyIgotsuchalowscore.Ifitisconvenientforyou,pleasegivemeanexplanation.Yourssincerely,LiHuaAfewdayslater,Ireceivedacallfrommyschool,sayingmycollegeacceptanceletterhadarrived.ThenIhurriedtotheschoolwithmyparents.Itwasbeyondmywildestdreamtillthatmoment.Asamatteroffact,IdoubtedthenwhetherIwasinthedream.Inormallydreadedthelongwalktotheschool.Butthatdaywasdifferent.Thereseemedtobesomethingintheair,anelectriccurrent,connectingmybodytotheletter.WhenIgotit,Iwasreallyafraidthattheenvelopwasempty.Buttherewasawhitepackageinside.Withmyheartbeatingfaster,Iwonderedwhetheritcouldreallybewhatwasexpected.Myparentsexcitedlysaidbehindme,“Well,opentheenvelop!”WhatIgrabbedinmyhandscontainedeverythingIhadbeenwaitingfor.Slowly,IopeneditandaflashofCONGRATULATIONSinboldbrightletterscaughtmyeyes.Afeelingofhappinessandreliefrushedthroughmybody.Iwasholdingmyfirstofferfromagoodcollege.Needlesstosay,itwouldnthavebeenpossibleifitwerentforthecountlesshoursofstudyingandwriting,butmostimportantly,myparentsconstantreminders,infact,werethebestformofeducationforme.“Thankyou,MomandDad!”Isaidgratefully.Usingthe5sensesinwritingcandeeplyimmersereadersinscenesandstories,whichcanelevateyourwritingtoahigherlevel.Nowletsseehowtoweavefivesensesintoyourdescriptionsofemotionsandstatesofthecharacters.2.一段式情感与状态描写视觉：视觉：Sight-whatyouseewithyoureyes,detailsofsurroundingsandpeoplethatyoucanobservewithyoureyes听觉：听觉：Sound-whatyouhearwithyourears,soundsintheenvironmentthatyouarein.触觉触觉：Touch-therearetwocategoriesofTOUCH(1)howyoufeel,theemotionsyouexperienceinasituation(2)thetextureofobjectsthatyoutouch,whichisthephysicalcontactwithobjects/people嗅觉嗅觉：Smell-whatyousmellwithyournose,thescentsandeventheodorsofanenvironment味觉味觉：Taste-whatyoutastewithyourtongue/whatyouexperiencewithyourlips2.describe the emotion of the characters:2.1.高兴描写Jasmine在英语演讲比赛中获得了第一名，她非常高兴高兴地走上台领奖。我们可以这样表述：JasminewonthefirstprizeintheEnglishSpeechContest.Shewasveryhappytowalkontothestagetoreceiveherprize.2.describe the emotion of the characters:假如从五感角度尝试描写，你会怎样描写呢？请试一试在以下段落空格处填入合适的词。JasminewonthefirstprizeintheEnglishSpeechContest.Hearingthenews,she_(乐得找不着北了)(Touch).She_(高兴地尖叫着跳了起来)(Sound&Sight)._(大步走上)ontothestagewithherchest_(骄傲地挺着胸膛)(Sight),shecouldntconcealhersmile.Afterreceivingherprize,she_(灿烂地笑着朝大家点头以示感谢)(Sight).A tingle of pleasure shot through herasshe_(品味着胜利的甜蜜滋味)(Taste).was on cloud nine/felt on top of the worldscreamed in delight and jumped for joy Striding her chest puffing out in pridesmiled widely and nodded to everyone in thanks savoured the sweet taste of winning2.describe the emotion of the characters:【名师解析】运用五感后，读者可以从触觉(wasoncloudnine),听觉(screamedindelight),视觉(jumpedforjoy,stridingontothestage,herchestpuffingoutinpride,smilewidelyandnoddedtoeveryoneinthanks),味觉(savourthesweettasteofwinning)来感知Jasmine获得第一名后她去领奖时的喜悦。读完这部分的描述，读者仿佛身临其境，犹如在现场目睹了Jasmine领奖时的场景。2.describe the emotion of the characters:学生初稿：ItwasaFridayafternoon.Afterschool,Tinawalkedbackhome.Asusual,arrivinghome,sheglancedatherwatchtoseewhattimewasitthen.However,shefoundherbelovedwatchwasgone.Itwasabirthdaygiftfromhergrandma.Shewasverysadandcriedalot.2.2.伤心请描写心爱的手表丢失了后伤心难过的场景。2.describe the emotion of the characters:思考：Q:Whenapersonlostherbelovedwatch,whatwouldshedo？Howwouldshecry?Howwouldshefeel?Doesherfavoritefoodstilltastedeliciousnow?Fromdifferentangles(Sight,Sound,Taste,Touch,Smell)toanswertheabovequestions.Sight:(Whatwouldshedo?)_Sound:(Howwouldshecry?)_Touch:(Howwouldshefeel?)_Taste&Smell:(Doesherfavoritefoodstilltastedeliciousnow?)_2.describe the emotion of the characters:Sight:_Sound:_sit glumly(闷闷不乐地坐在那里)；search hither and thither for it unshed tears brim in ones eyes(眼眶里满是泪水)；(四处寻找手表)；rack ones brains(绞尽脑汁)；try to recall when sb has last seenthe watch;a dark cloud looms over ones head(乌云笼罩在.的头顶)；big fat tears roll down ones cheeks(大颗的眼泪顺着脸颊流了下来)sob ones heart out so loudly(哭的很大声)bawl ones heart out(嚎啕大哭);weep buckets of tears(流了很多眼泪)2.describe the emotion of the characters:Touch:_Taste&Smell:_ a curtain of grief envelop sb(一阵悲伤包裹着她);feel blue(感觉很忧伤)be anxious like ants on hot bricks(急feel devastated(感觉极度悲痛的);sadness overwhelm sb(悲伤笼罩着某人)；dont have the spirit to do anything(没有兴致做任何事)的像热锅上的蚂蚁);favorite food tastes bland in ones sadness of losing his/her beloved watch.(最喜爱的食物也因丢了心爱的手表食之无味了)unable to work up any appetite(没有任何食欲);work up激起lose ones appetite(没有