动作细节描写动作细节描写by Kevin Soy读后续写专项训练 1One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom. “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away.With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.“Tom!” she cried. Help!No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now. Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again. (2016.10浙江)小结1.动作细节的描写应该围绕着一个中心展开，否则会导致叙述散乱，内容混杂；2.动作细节的描写应该组织一系列的动词，以动作的次第发生来叙述整个过程；3.动作细节的描写应该有相应信息的支撑，以丰富细节内容，增强可读性。1. 上周日李华坐公交车去新华书店买书，过程却不太顺利。请设计一个情节，描述具体经过，词数80左右。Last Sunday, Li Hua went to Xinhua Bookstore to buy a book. _1. 上周日李华坐公交车去新华书店买书，过程却不太顺利。请设计一个情节，描述具体经过，词数80左右。去书店的路上不顺利在书店买书不顺利出门公交车没来发现公交车停开换车车子故障很晚到达书店喜欢的书只剩一本其他顾客拿到那本询问售货员售货员又找到一本书本破损买到后发现对面商店有同款Last Sunday, Li Hua went to Xinhua Bookstore to buy a book. After breakfast, he came to the bus stop near his home. As was scheduled, the bus should arrive in 5 minutes. However, he waited for about 10 minutes but no bus came. A few minutes later, he and other passengers were told to get on another bus which went on a different route. Halfway, the bus broke down. As a result, he had to change the bus again. Finally, he got to the bookstore at the lunch time, almost two hours later than expected.2. Jeff 是一位非常关心学生的老师，昨天午饭后班里同学Kate突然鼻子流血不止。请设计一个情节详细描述Jeff采取的行动重点体现他对学生的关爱。约80词。Yesterday Jeff was in the classroom talking to a student after lunch. _2. Jeff 是一位非常关心学生的老师，昨天午饭后班里同学Kate突然鼻子流血不止。请设计一个情节详细描述Jeff才去的行动重点体现他对学生的关爱。约80词。Jeff在教室里解决了问题Jeff未能解决问题，因而求助医生体现出Jeff的急切和关爱。Yesterday Jeff was in the classroom talking to a student after lunch. Suddenly Kates nose started to bleed. Jeff rushed to Kate in no time. He told Kate to lean her head backwards. After that, he got some tissue from a student and tried to clean Kates mouth and cheeks. Finding her bleeding impossible to stop, Jeff phoned the doctor to ask what to do. The doctor advised Kate to be sent to him as soon as possible. Immediately, Jeff went to the doctor with Kate. He stayed there with her until she was fine two hours later.实战演练实战演练3. 王涛即将大学毕业，正在寻找工作，上周他参加了一次面试。请设计一个情节详细描述他进入面试房间后的动作，突出当时相对压抑的氛围。80词左右Hearing his name called, Wang Tao opened the door and stepped in. _Hearing his name called, Wang Tao opened the door and stepped in. He immediately felt stared at. Three judges, seated behind the desk, examined him from head to feet. Wang Tao checked his suit, finding nothing improper and then relaxed a bit. After he was allowed to take a seat, Wang Tao glanced at the judges and quickly moved his sight back to his fingers as if he had done something wrong. The judges wore no smile, still looking at him. He sat straight up, trying to keep up his courage, and waited to be asked questions.