重庆市实验中学重庆市实验中学 欢迎您！欢迎您！高考英语作文优化高考英语作文优化 重庆市实验中学 刘志强 Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. But today is a gift. That is why it is called the present!昨天已成追忆，明天还很神秘。昨天已成追忆，明天还很神秘。现在是个礼物，它称之为今天。现在是个礼物，它称之为今天。 Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery.But today is a gift. That is why it is called the present!要求：要求： 就此材料发表你的看法；就此材料发表你的看法； 紧扣材料，有明确的观点；紧扣材料，有明确的观点； 词数不少于词数不少于6060。 写作：请结合材料，按要求用英语写作写作：请结合材料，按要求用英语写作（1515分）分） 学生原作：学生原作： Tomorrow will better? No one really knows. Yesterday brings us memories. We can only have today. We live in the moment to make tomorrow nice. Time passingby, it like the wind blow through the leaves. It doesnt leave any signs.We want our dreams to fly and let it go with the wind. Once time is losing, it will never be found again. By using time well, we can have a beautiful future. Lets make good use of today. Lets come true our dream. 重庆市高考英语书面表达评分标准重庆市高考英语书面表达评分标准第一档（第一档（1 13 3分）分）未达到总体要求。未达到总体要求。未结合材料；内容混乱， 缺乏条理性；语言运用差， 错误很多， 严重影响观点表达。第二档（第二档（4 47 7分）分）未达到总体要求。未达到总体要求。未有效结合材料；内容松散， 条理性较差；语言运用较差， 错误较多， 但基本能表达观点。 重庆市高考英语书面表达评分标准重庆市高考英语书面表达评分标准第三档（第三档（8 81111分）分）基本达到总体要求。基本达到总体要求。有效结合材料， 观点基本明确；内容基本连贯， 有一定的条理性；语言运用基本得体， 有少量错误， 但能表达观点。第四档（第四档（12121515分）分）很好地达到总体要求。很好地达到总体要求。有效结合材料， 观点明确；内容连贯内容连贯， 条理清晰；语言运用得体语言运用得体， 词汇丰富词汇丰富， 几乎没有语言错误。 英语作文的常用优化技巧英语作文的常用优化技巧 一一. 活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。 二二. 善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。 四四. 使用三大从句，突显逻辑层次。使用三大从句，突显逻辑层次。 三三. 运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。 五五. 妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。英语作文的常用优化技巧英语作文的常用优化技巧一一. 活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。1.Applying advanced vocabulary is very helpful to improving our English compositions. Applying advanced vocabulary _ to improving our English compositions. is of great help2. Our efforts today lead to tomorrows success. Our efforts today _ tomorrows success. contribute toOur efforts today _ tomorrows success result in 3.3.单句提升单句提升 She is a famous singer. (Try to express its certainty.) Theres no doubt that she is a famous singer. Undoubtedly, she is a famous singer. No one can deny the fact that she is a famous singer. Theres no denying that she is a famous singer. It goes without saying that she is a famous singer. It is universally acknowledged that she is a famous singer.英语作文的常用优化技巧英语作文的常用优化技巧二二. 善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。1.1. It is n. / adj. for/ of sb to do sth2.2. There be 句型及其变体There seems to be There is no denying thatThere existsPeople have different opinions on this issue.人们对此问题人们对此问题观点观点各各不相同不相同。There _ different opinions on this issue among people. exist3.3. 祈使句 and/ or 一般将来时4.4. 倒装句 By no means 部分倒装 Only in this way 部分倒装Only by doing 部分倒装5.5. 强调句型 It is that/ who三三. 运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。英语作文的常用优化技巧英语作文的常用优化技巧1.1.肯定用否定表达肯定用否定表达Im very tired.Im _ tired.2.2.否定用肯定表达否定用肯定表达His performance is not satisfactory. His performance is _ satisfactory.3.3.最高级用比较级表达最高级用比较级表达Health is the most important.Nothing is more important than health.far fromnot a little 找出错误，指出不足找出错误，指出不足 Tomorrow will better? No one really knows. Yesterday brings us memories. We can only have today. We live in the moment to make tomorrow nice. Time passingby, it like the wind blow through the leaves. It doesnt leave any signs. We want our dreams to fly and let it go with the wind. Once time is losing, it will never be found again. By using time well, we can have a beautiful future. Lets make good use of today. Lets come true our dream. 小组活动小组活动（四人一组，优化原作）（四人一组，优化原作）（四人一组，优化原作）（四人一组，优化原作） Tomorrow will better? No one really knows. Yesterday brings us memories. We can only have today. We live in the moment to make tomorrow nice. Time passingby, it like the wind blow through the leaves. It doesnt leave any signs. We want our dreams to fly and let it go with the wind. Once time is losing, it will never be found again. By using time well, we can have a beautiful future. Lets make good use of today. Lets come true our dream. Present & Evaluate the improved composition Presentation & Evaluation 展示并评价优化后的作文展示并评价优化后的作文A Composition from Another StudentA Composition from Another Student A memorable yesterday always comes from a valuable today. If you can take full advantage of your present to fight for your future, you will gain an enviable memory to recall in the rest of your life. Therefore, what we ought to bear in mind is that only by cherishing present are we able to create promising future. Learn from yesterday, live for today, hope for tomorrow,and youll lead a magic life you have never imagined. Yesterday is the best memory you have and present is the best gift that God present to you. Tomorrow is a mystery, which means that your future is unpredictable. As far as Im concerned, the only thing we can make good use of is present. 英语作文的常用优化技巧英语作文的常用优化技巧 一一. 活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。 二二. 善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。 三三. 使用三大从句，突显逻辑层次。使用三大从句，突显逻辑层次。 四四. 运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。 五五. 妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。英语作文的常用优化技巧英语作文的常用优化技巧五五. 妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。将下列句子的状语从句改为非谓作状语：将下列句子的状语从句改为非谓作状语： When we heard the news, we jumped with joy. Hearing the news, we jumped with joy. After everything was done, they sat in the yard andchatted with the elderly people. Everything done, they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people.四四. 使用三大从句，突显逻辑层次。使用三大从句，突显逻辑层次。英语作文的常用优化技巧英语作文的常用优化技巧Please fill in the blanks with proper words_ _ _ we attach great importance to English compositions is _ they have a great impact on our score of English exams. _ we ought to bear in mind is _ _ we are writing English compositions, advanced words and classic sentencepatterns should be used as much as we can. Only in this way, _ _ _ _ produce excellent essays. 我们要非常重视英语作文，原因是英语作文对我们的我们要非常重视英语作文，原因是英语作文对我们的考试成绩有着极大影响。我们要记住的是英语写作的时候考试成绩有着极大影响。我们要记住的是英语写作的时候要尽可能多用高级词汇和经典句型。只有这样，我们才有要尽可能多用高级词汇和经典句型。只有这样，我们才有可能写出好作文。可能写出好作文。The reason why thatWhatthat when are we likely to