单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,二级,三级,四级,五级,2024/12/17,#,高考英语,读后续写语篇,练习,蒂姆海上航行：危机中的成长之旅,1,题目分析,读后续写,题目再现,范文呈现,努力方向,2,Part 1,题目呈现,3,续写原文,Tim and his father were sailing at sea.He tried to remember all the sailing knowledge his father taught.However,it wasnt easy for him.He could only master the skills to tie ropes and wear a life jacket in case of emergency.,Tim pulled in the sail(,帆,)of the boat over his head successfully.He looked back at his father,hoping for a smile or a nod.But his dad was looking up at the sail,not at him.Tim enjoyed sailing with his father,but he also felt nervous and different from his confident father.,Suddenly,the wind was blowing angrily.He put on his life jacket nervously.By comparison,his father never wore a life jacket,for he had been swimming and sailing for his entire life.,4,续写原文,“Tim,can you take the helm(,方向盘,)for a minute?”his father asked,“Just keep it going straight.Ill run up to the back of the boat to check something.”Considering the changing weather,Tim hesitated,but he didnt want to see the familiar disapproving look on his fathers face.“Uh,sure,”he replied and went to hold the helm tightly.,Suddenly,the wind shifted direction and the boat heeled(,倾斜,)so sharply that it might turn over.Tim knew he had to let some air out of the sail to help right the boat,but he would have to let go of the helm to do that.,5,续写原文,He looked back for his father,but the sail blocked his view.“Dad!”he called,but the wind swallowed his voice.His heart was pounding in his ears.The boat began to heel more.Tim knew he had to act fast.He held the helm with one hand and used the other hand to reach for the mainsail line,trying to loosen it.After a few attempts,he managed to let the air out of the sail.The boat quickly righted itself.,Tim gave a sigh of relief.Then he looked around for his father.But there was no sign of him.,6,段首句,Paragraph 1,：,Suddenly,he saw a flash of something in the water.,Paragraph 2,：,His father finally climbed back into the boat with Tims help.,7,Part 2,题目分析,8,续写原文分析,9,文中讲述了蒂姆和父亲出海航行，他虽努力学习但只掌握了系绳和穿救生衣等基础技能。航行中，蒂姆成功拉起船帆，渴望父亲认可却未得回应，还因父亲的自信对比而感到紧张。天气突变，父亲让蒂姆掌舵，风使船急剧倾斜，蒂姆面临既要稳住船又要放帆的艰难抉择。他克服恐惧，单手掌舵并用另一只手艰难地松开主帆线放气，最终使船恢复平稳，可父亲却不见了踪影。这次经历让蒂姆在危机中成长，也让故事充满了悬念。,点,1,：位于,续写第一段段首,，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；,点,2,：位于,续写第一段段尾,，流畅衔接第二段段首句；,点,3,：位于,续写第二段段首,，续写衔接第二段段首语；,点,4,：,文章结尾升华,，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。,情节构建的重点,10,续写思路分析,Para 1,：,Suddenly,he saw a flash of something in the water.,Suddenly,he saw a flash of something in the water.,蒂姆的心猛地一紧，双眼紧紧盯着那片闪烁的波光。他的脑海中瞬间闪过无数念头，是不是有什么危险的海洋生物？或者是船只的零件掉落？海风呼啸着，吹乱了他的头发，他却浑然不觉，双手不自觉地抓紧了船舷，身体前倾，试图看清楚那到底是什么。此时，船身随着海浪微微摇晃，他的双腿也有些发软，但强烈的好奇心和对未知的警惕使他没有退缩。他眯起眼睛，在阳光的反射下，终于看清那是父亲的手表，一瞬间，不祥的预感涌上心头，他意识到父亲可能遭遇了意外，内心的恐惧急剧攀升，额头上也冒出了细密的汗珠。,11,续写思路分析,Para 2,：,His father finally climbed back into the boat with Tims help.,His father finally climbed back into the boat with Tims help.,蒂姆看到父亲的那一刻，眼眶一下子湿润了，他赶忙伸出手，用尽全身力气去拉父亲。父亲的脸色有些苍白，衣服也湿透了，紧紧地贴在身上。蒂姆一边拉，一边带着哭腔说道：“爸爸，你没事吧！我以为,”,父亲虚弱地笑了笑，安慰他说：“孩子，我没事，多亏了你。”蒂姆扶着父亲在船上坐好，然后迅速拿起船上的毛巾，小心翼翼地为父亲擦拭脸上和身上的海水。看着父亲逐渐恢复了一些血色，蒂姆悬着的心才慢慢放下，他紧紧地抱住父亲，感受着失而复得的喜悦，同时也为自己刚刚独自应对危机的成长感到一丝自豪。在这一刻，父子之间的情感似乎更加深厚了，他们知道，这次的经历将成为他们心中难以磨灭的记忆，也让蒂姆更加明白在困难面前要冷静和勇敢。,12,Part 3,范文呈现,13,范文呈现,Suddenly,he saw a flash of something in the water.Tims heart skipped a beat as his eyes locked onto the glimmering object.His mind raced with a thousand thoughts.Could it be a dangerous sea creature?Or perhaps a part of the boat that had fallen off?The wind howled,whipping his hair into a frenzy,but he was oblivious to it,his hands instinctively gripping the side of the boat tightly.He leaned forward,straining to make out what it was.The boat rocked gently with the waves,and his legs felt a bit wobbly,but his intense curiosity and wariness of the unknown held him back from retreating.Squinting his eyes against the sunlights reflection,he finally realized it was his fathers watch.In an instant,a sense of foreboding washed over him,and he knew something might have happened to his father.His fear spiked,and beads of sweat formed on his forehead.,14,范文呈现,His father finally climbed back into the boat with Tims help.The moment Tim saw his father,his eyes welled up with tears.He quickly reached out and,with all his might,pulled his father aboard.His fathers face was a bit pale,and his clothes were soaked,clinging to his body.While pulling,Tim sobbed and said,Dad,are you okay!I thought.His father managed a weak smile and replied,Son,Im fine.Thanks to you.Tim helped his father sit down steadily in the boat and then swiftly grabbed a towel on board,carefully wiping the seawater off his fathers face and body.Seeing his father regain some color,Tims heart gradually settled.He hugged his father tightly,savoring the joy of having him back,and also feeling a tinge of pride for his growth in handling the crisis alone.At this moment,the bond between father and son seemed to grow even stronger.They knew this experience would be an indelible memory in their hearts and had taught Tim the importance of bein